Oct 9 in 2024, Listening music for mental change is important

I’m still busy today, too.

These day, I have been always keeping high-tension for my work.

But, it is not good for long time period.

Sometimes we need refresh.

One of the way of reliefing our tention instantly is listening music.

I’ve noticed that even if during my working time, listening music can be refreshed my mental.

Corrected by Gramara

I’m still busy right now.

These days, I have always been high on tension at work. 

 But that doesn’t mean it’s good for a long time period. 

Sometimes we need to refresh ourselves. 

One  way of reliefing our tension instantly is by listening to music.

I’ve noticed that even while working , listening to music can refresh my mental state.

Corrected by GPT

“I’m still busy today, too.

These days, I have always been feeling high tension at work.

However, it is not good to maintain this for a long period.

Sometimes, we need to refresh ourselves.

One way to relieve tension instantly is by listening to music.

I’ve noticed that even during my working hours, listening to music can refresh my mind.”

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Here are the specific corrections:

1. “These day, I have been always keeping high-tension for my work.”
   • Corrected to: “These days, I have always been feeling high tension at work.”
   • “These day” should be “These days” because you are talking about a general period.
   • “keeping high-tension” is awkward; “feeling high tension” is more natural.
   • “for my work” is better expressed as “at work.”
2. “But, it is not good for long time period.”
   • Corrected to: “However, it is not good to maintain this for a long period.”
   • “But” is replaced with “However” for a smoother transition.
   • “for long time period” should be “for a long period.”
3. “Sometimes we need refresh.”
   • Corrected to: “Sometimes, we need to refresh ourselves.”
   • “refresh” should be “refresh ourselves” for clarity.
4. “One of the way of reliefing our tention instantly is listening music.”
   • Corrected to: “One way to relieve tension instantly is by listening to music.”
   • “One of the way” should be “One way.”
   • “reliefing” is incorrect; it should be “relieve.”
   • “our tention” is corrected to “tension.”
   • “listening music” should be “listening to music.”
5. “I’ve noticed that even if during my working time, listening music can be refreshed my mental.”
   • Corrected to: “I’ve noticed that even during my working hours, listening to music can refresh my mind.”
   • “even if during” should be “even during.”
   • “working time” is more naturally expressed as “working hours.”
   • “listening music can be refreshed my mental” is rephrased to “listening to music can refresh my mind” for clarity and grammatical accuracy.